Friday, 21 June 2013

Third Time



Third Time's The Charm
(33 Words - A writing prompt from Trifecta)



Three young heroes, came one by one to slay her.  Wicked witch.   Perhaps she was, yet she wept as they died.   In the blood of the last bonny boy the talisman shivered, alive.

32 comments:

  1. I like the way in which you leave to wonder of the witch's multi-faceted persona - was she wicked? what type of tears were shed, as there was apparently reward to be gained. Great depth in so few words, Thomas.

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  2. WOW..you. This was deliciously devious as if you never quite know her nature. As if the light and dark side of anyone is always swirled.

    Great writing, amazing.

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  3. There is something else going on! Good one!

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  4. I love the image of the talisman shivering while the witch is watching (hopeful?). Great 33 words!

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  5. Elegantly crafted, as ever! LM x

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  6. Nice! I wonder if she was as evil as believed. Maybe not...

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    1. A moot point - I suppose it depends which way you're facing.

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  7. So intriguing. Much left to wonder about.

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  8. Nothing more powerful than blood. Except perhaps a witch's tears.
    Nicely done. Though I'm sure there's more, it stands well alone.

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    1. Blood and tears, witch's fears, endless dry and hopeless years...

      Glad you liked it

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  9. Love how you were able to make a complicated character in just 33 words. Nice!

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  10. weeping witch... nice touch.

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  11. the last bonny boy . . . good stuff!

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  12. Wow. There is so much left untold here, yet it simultaneously says so much. Wonderful writing.

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    1. Pleased that you liked it, thank you

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  13. Wasn't expecting the twist, and it was delightfully dark when came.

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  14. neat how much you got in in 33 words

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  15. Ooh, love this! So much going on in those 33 words. Beautiful!

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  16. I always enjoy how, in your stories, there is never a straight line taking us from beginning to end. You are ruler of the curved and curlicue lines! Nicely done yet again, Thomas :))

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  17. Oooh wow this is a nice twist on the old "evil witch" tale! Great job!

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  18. This proves that you shouldn't judge someone without knowing them. Very good! I love that you made me want to cry for her.

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  19. Wonderful story here... that talisman really sticks.

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  20. These bonny boys, these heroes-I love that she wept at the nobility of their intentions. This one will stick with me for a while, Thomas:) Excellently done!

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