Friday, 7 June 2013

Felix Ascendant


(A writing prompt from Trifecta: to write a story in three sentences)




“He served five years for petty treason after stealing her highness’ soul gem from her garter of office,” grumbled the Hierophant-in-Virtua.

“And another five years after that for filching the imperial omniclave from under the nose of the Grand Justicar,” added the Coin Shriver.


“Then a new face and a new job with us,” said the young prince, grinning, “will be his third and final sentence.”

31 comments:

  1. Poacher as game-keeper? If you can't beat 'em, employ 'em!

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  2. I would love to see the job description of that! LM x

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  3. Seems all that time in prison wasn't wasted - he now has a new job!
    Three great sentences.

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  4. sometimes your weaknesses turn out to be your greatest strengths. Right? ;)

    I really enjoyed this, could see it all happening.

    :)

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  5. I love that his third and final sentence is your third and final sentence. Well done

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  6. I like your play on words with the 'third sentence," and the prompt. Very clever.

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  7. I don't think it's a good sign when employment is a punishment!

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  8. It is a cautionary tale. If your new job requires a new face, you need to interview for something else.

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    1. That's true... not sure how much choice that Felix has in this particular recruitment process :D

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  9. I also love that his third and final sentence is your third and final sentence too. Very clever twist, Thomas!

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    1. Valerie said exactly what I was thinking! So, I'll just say: ditto. :)) Always intriguing!

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    2. Thank you :D I had to find a twist somewhere, it's a compulsion.

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  10. Sticky fingers always lead to a mess!

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  11. This career criminal seems to be destined to get caught.

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    1. Indeed so - one wonders if the Prince has factored that in

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  12. Ha! The prince will finally best the thief he believes.

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    1. He may be right, too. But things in the Onyx Imperium never run smoothly...

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  13. I love your nomenclature here (for lack of a better word). "Hierophant-in-virtua," "imperial omniclave," "Grand Justicar," "Coin Shriver." So much setting in so few words! Brilliant.

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    1. Thanks for the feedback, I and the Vocabulatrix are both glad you liked it :D

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  14. not much of new things to say ... mostly an echo of things said above ... how cool nomenclature ... !

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    1. Thanks Shreya, glad you liked things

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  15. Love the play on the third sentence, but the grin and his conceit that it be final is very unsettling!

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