Tuesday 28 January 2014

Portal


Thomas Leuthard  Foter.com  CC by 

On each walk from slumber to drudgery I pass you.   Free behind glass, learning, lost in the new.   How many worlds would I glimpse if you looked up, our eyes met?   Save me.


(A writing prompt from Trifecta - 33 words based on the photograph above)

28 comments:

  1. Sometimes a glimpse is just enough LM x

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    1. Just enough and all that's ever needed to change a life and the world

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  2. Love, love, love..... gorgeously written. So romantically poetic...

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  3. Oh, I want her to look up. I want her to save this lost soul. Achingly brilliantly gorgeous, Thomas.

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    1. Thank you! Really appreciate your feedback

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  4. Nice! Especially this: How many worlds would I glimpse if you looked up, our eyes met?

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    1. Every new moment is a whole new world if it's taken in the right spirit. Glad you liked it

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  5. oh my, so much longing conveyed in just 33 words. Lovely. Just lovely :)))

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  6. My favorite so far, I love thinking of that meeting of eyes. So romantic, so healing, so saving. Your choice of words was poetic and beautiful.

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    1. Thanks Kir, I really do appreciate you taking the time to read and comment

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  7. wonderful scene created - the longing for that one look.

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  8. Those last two words packed a punch. Nice work!

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    1. Thank you, and thank you for taking the time to comment

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  9. How very romantic and full of longing-beautiful!

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    1. That was the intention - so pleased you liked it

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  10. Lovely! Fantastically evocative imagery. Love this line "How many worlds would I glimpse if you looked up" - brilliant!

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  11. When a glimpse becomes a bridge between worlds. Well done.

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    1. Every new encounter is such a bridge - thank you

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  12. Gorgeous. She's like a living daydream to him, a tangible reminder of what he doesn't have but wishes for. I love it.

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  13. Good concept, curiosity, possibly passion about who could be working there. Nice twist on two ships who pass in the night.

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