Monday, 13 January 2014

Reflections on a life



A33-word response to the following snippet: The first time I saw. . . 
Here's the catch: all of your 33 words must be one syllable each 
(a writing prompt from Trifecta)



The first time I saw him I thought he was Death.  He looked the part.  Gaunt, pale, more skull than face.   I reached out to fend him off… Smooth glass.  Then I knew, and I laughed too long.

46 comments:

  1. I like this! A jolt of "man in the mirror" truth.

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  2. Well that is a bad wake-up call.

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  3. Wonderful. Haunting. I loved the "more skull than face".

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  4. Yikes. Where had he been the night before?! Cleverly crafted. Thanks for linking up!

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  5. I, too, hope I can one day laugh over that realization! ;)

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  6. You get to an age when looking in mirrors is not a good idea.
    I enjoyed your take on the prompt.

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  7. I loved the realization, how we get there to the point of "who is that in the glass?" and then the answer..
    laughing with mirth is the best option, I think. :)

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    1. Thanks Kir, the other options are worse I think

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  8. Ha! Someone needs to work on their appearance...

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  9. I'm with Kir:) I always have to laugh (at myself) when I catch a glimpse of my reflection in a store window, or mirror and for a few seconds I don't recognize myself. Maybe a good thing? ;)

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    1. I think you're right - and how about hearing your own voice via a recording? *shudders*

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  10. I just adore the end - laughing too long. Yes. Oh, yes.
    Fantastic, Thomas!

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  11. I've looked like Death, in the mirror, far too many times than I care to admit. You did a great job crafting this moment of fear and redemption. Worth a good laugh, I'd say. Well done. :)

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  12. The first time seemed dark and a bit foreboding. The second time I read it, I saw the lighter take. Nicely done, Thomas :)))

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  13. Haha this is awesome :D More skull than face and it was you :P :P Amazing, very genius attempt.

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  14. This is great! Love the line where the realization dawns...

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  15. Seeing through the mirror darkly, eh? I've seen that same face!

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  16. Ohh... Duuuuuude. This one is a winner in my books! Eerie and mysterious and with a killer ending. Absolutely brilliant.

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  17. Wow, great writing and great scene you created!

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    1. I do like to be tricky from time to time. Thank you!

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    1. Good to know - thank you for responding

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  20. Love the twist! This was me Saturday morning after my son's birthday sleepover. :)

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