A33-word response to the following snippet: The first time I saw. . .
Here's the catch: all of your 33 words must be one syllable each
(a writing prompt from Trifecta)
The first time I saw him I thought he was Death. He looked the part. Gaunt, pale, more skull than face. I reached out to fend him off… Smooth
glass. Then I knew, and I laughed too
long.
I like this! A jolt of "man in the mirror" truth.
ReplyDeleteGlad you liked it, thanks
DeleteWell that is a bad wake-up call.
ReplyDeleteOne of the worst, indeed
DeleteWonderful. Haunting. I loved the "more skull than face".
ReplyDeleteGlad you liked it - much appreciated
DeleteYikes. Where had he been the night before?! Cleverly crafted. Thanks for linking up!
ReplyDeleteThanks for the innovative prompt
DeleteI, too, hope I can one day laugh over that realization! ;)
ReplyDeleteI hope you would never need to
DeleteYou get to an age when looking in mirrors is not a good idea.
ReplyDeleteI enjoyed your take on the prompt.
Glad you liked it, thank you
DeleteI loved the realization, how we get there to the point of "who is that in the glass?" and then the answer..
ReplyDeletelaughing with mirth is the best option, I think. :)
Thanks Kir, the other options are worse I think
DeleteHa! Someone needs to work on their appearance...
ReplyDeleteA nice spa day at the very least
DeleteI'm with Kir:) I always have to laugh (at myself) when I catch a glimpse of my reflection in a store window, or mirror and for a few seconds I don't recognize myself. Maybe a good thing? ;)
ReplyDeleteI think you're right - and how about hearing your own voice via a recording? *shudders*
DeleteI just adore the end - laughing too long. Yes. Oh, yes.
ReplyDeleteFantastic, Thomas!
Thanks Kymm, glad you liked it
DeleteI've looked like Death, in the mirror, far too many times than I care to admit. You did a great job crafting this moment of fear and redemption. Worth a good laugh, I'd say. Well done. :)
ReplyDeleteMuch appreciated Tom
DeleteOh! That was a surprise. Fantastic!
ReplyDeleteHaha this is awesome :D More skull than face and it was you :P :P Amazing, very genius attempt.
ReplyDeleteYou're very kind, thank you!
DeleteThis is great! Love the line where the realization dawns...
ReplyDeleteReally glad you liked it
DeleteWonderful twist!
ReplyDeleteThanks Grace
DeleteSeeing through the mirror darkly, eh? I've seen that same face!
ReplyDeleteNot too clearly, I hope :D
Deletelove the end surprise!
ReplyDeleteThanks Sun. really glad you liked it
DeleteOhh... Duuuuuude. This one is a winner in my books! Eerie and mysterious and with a killer ending. Absolutely brilliant.
ReplyDeleteThat made my day, thank you!
DeleteWow, great writing and great scene you created!
ReplyDeleteThank you, I'm glad you liked it
DeleteTricky -- and so good.
ReplyDeleteI do like to be tricky from time to time. Thank you!
DeleteVery thought-provoking
ReplyDeleteGood to know - thank you for responding
DeleteThank you Jo-Anne, glad you liked it
ReplyDeleteAwesome work.
ReplyDeleteLove the twist! This was me Saturday morning after my son's birthday sleepover. :)
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