Tuesday, 28 January 2014

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On each walk from slumber to drudgery I pass you.   Free behind glass, learning, lost in the new.   How many worlds would I glimpse if you looked up, our eyes met?   Save me.


(A writing prompt from Trifecta - 33 words based on the photograph above)
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28 comments:

  1. Lyssa Medana28 January 2014 at 11:29

    Sometimes a glimpse is just enough LM x

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    1. Unknown1 February 2014 at 12:41

      Just enough and all that's ever needed to change a life and the world

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  2. rebecca28 January 2014 at 15:53

    Love, love, love..... gorgeously written. So romantically poetic...

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  3. Anonymous28 January 2014 at 18:18

    Oh, I want her to look up. I want her to save this lost soul. Achingly brilliantly gorgeous, Thomas.

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    1. Unknown1 February 2014 at 12:42

      Thank you! Really appreciate your feedback

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  4. Anonymous28 January 2014 at 18:34

    Nice! Especially this: How many worlds would I glimpse if you looked up, our eyes met?

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    1. Unknown1 February 2014 at 12:42

      Every new moment is a whole new world if it's taken in the right spirit. Glad you liked it

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  5. Jo-Anne Teal29 January 2014 at 07:44

    oh my, so much longing conveyed in just 33 words. Lovely. Just lovely :)))

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  6. Kir29 January 2014 at 12:57

    My favorite so far, I love thinking of that meeting of eyes. So romantic, so healing, so saving. Your choice of words was poetic and beautiful.

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    1. Unknown1 February 2014 at 12:43

      Thanks Kir, I really do appreciate you taking the time to read and comment

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  7. kymm29 January 2014 at 15:50

    Oh, for that glimpse!

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  8. sun29 January 2014 at 16:14

    wonderful scene created - the longing for that one look.

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  9. Anonymous29 January 2014 at 23:21

    Those last two words packed a punch. Nice work!

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    1. Unknown1 February 2014 at 12:44

      Thank you, and thank you for taking the time to comment

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  10. Atreyee30 January 2014 at 16:38

    How very romantic and full of longing-beautiful!

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    1. Unknown1 February 2014 at 12:44

      That was the intention - so pleased you liked it

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  11. Anonymous31 January 2014 at 00:51

    Lovely! Fantastically evocative imagery. Love this line "How many worlds would I glimpse if you looked up" - brilliant!

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  12. Thomas Charles MacInnes31 January 2014 at 01:01

    When a glimpse becomes a bridge between worlds. Well done.

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    1. Unknown1 February 2014 at 12:45

      Every new encounter is such a bridge - thank you

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  13. Anonymous31 January 2014 at 20:33

    Gorgeous. She's like a living daydream to him, a tangible reminder of what he doesn't have but wishes for. I love it.

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  14. Trifecta3 February 2014 at 03:09

    Such pathos and melancholy.

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  15. Ann Bennett3 February 2014 at 14:30

    Good concept, curiosity, possibly passion about who could be working there. Nice twist on two ships who pass in the night.

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