(a writing prompt from Trifecta)
The two men watched, seeing unseen, as the young woman on
the monitor moved her arms and hands and fingers.
“Tai-Chi?” said the younger man. The name badge on his white coat read Frankl. He could not take his eyes from the screen and the constant intricate gestures.
“No,” The older man was short and white haired. Nobody pestered Doctor Kessler about name badges or rules and regulations. “Not Tai-Chi. They look more like yoga mudra, but not from any tradition I know.”
“You do yoga?”
“I read books,” said Kessler testily.
The woman had been found wandering in Munich, stark naked, stumbling
and her inability to respond to the presence of others had led to her being
given over into the care of the Planck Institute. She’d been catatonic for just over a month.
“When did the gestures start?”
“When did the gestures start?”
“A week ago,” Kessler said.
“About the same time that the tattoo on the nape of her neck started to
fade.” He smiled like a chess player.
Frankl kept his eyes on the woman and her deliberate complex
dance of hands and fingers. He could
not see the back of her neck, her blonde hair was in a long braid.
“Tattoos don’t fade,”
he said, “Unless it was henna or some temporary-“
Kessler showed him a photograph. The design was black and angular and looked like
a pair of spiders with interlocking legs.
“A tattoo. And it’s gone. And now this.”
“But…”
“I know. The same gestures over and over. Twenty four distinct patterns then they repeat. Minor variations.” Kessler nodded to himself. “Getting more precise I think.”
“I know. The same gestures over and over. Twenty four distinct patterns then they repeat. Minor variations.” Kessler nodded to himself. “Getting more precise I think.”
“Some obsessive compulsive syndrome?”
“Clearly. But nothing
I’ve seen before. Damnation…” Kessler’s nose had started bleeding, he raised his hand to wipe the blood away.
The woman stood gracefully from her cross-legged position. Frankl reeled, suddenly dizzy and the
monitor screen flickered briefly.
“My damned nose,” Kessler muttered pressing a handkerchief
to his nostrils to staunch the blood.
“She’s gone,” Frankl said, “She’s just… gone.”
C'mon!!! haha what, but, but... stay tuned eh Thomas? Have you heard of Victor Frankl?
ReplyDeleteI have, but no relation to this Frankl. Thanks for the comment :D
DeleteI think that if these two are lucky, she won't come back.
ReplyDeleteThe two doctors are nice enough people so she may not have any ill feeling toward them. But perhaps their lives would be simpler without her.
DeleteYou create such fascinating characters. I would love to see all these in a collection sometime.
ReplyDeleteThank you for saying so - I'm already entertaining some thoughts in that direction, so you've just added a bit of encouragement.
DeleteWhoa, that's strange. I'd agree with Whispatory - I think it might be a good thing she's gone.
ReplyDeleteLuckily for Frankl and Kessler, she has business elsewhere - with the person who put the tattoo on her for a start.
DeletePeople fade with their tattoos - mysterious to say the least. I love your work, Thomas, well-written.
ReplyDeleteThanks Steph, I really appreciate the comment
DeleteThis is great- My laugh out loud line was "You do yoga?" And Frank's classic response. The tatoo fading, the strange movements, the nosebleed. Terrific piece.
ReplyDeleteSo glad you liked it, thank you.
Deleteooooo dude this is so cool! It is downright eerie haha :D
ReplyDeleteGlad to hear it :D
DeleteGreat write... what characters you develop here... and she seems to be a lady to beware of.
ReplyDeleteThanks Bjorn - I get the feeling that *someone* will be in trouble when she gets where she's going. Glad you liked it
DeleteBlood, gestures, and spiders...a winning combination, my friend! Great piece :)
ReplyDeleteGlad you liked it, and yes they do form a fun combination.
DeleteI'm riveted. Next part please.
ReplyDeleteThank you! I may indulge myself and provide the next instalment shortly
DeleteThomas-this is unlike anything I've ever read before, and I mean that as the highest compliment. It really shows off the depths of your creativity! Very well done-and yes, totally cool!!
ReplyDeleteThanks Valerie, I'm really glad you liked this.
DeleteLove this! So intriguing. I would love to see more of her story.
ReplyDeleteIt sounds like I need to continue this :D Thanks very much.
DeleteThis is tightly written and intriguing. I'd like to know more.
ReplyDeleteThanks Trifecta, more may be forthcoming I feel
DeleteWow.
ReplyDeleteLove the nerdy, rigid observers (Kessler's "testily"!) and the sexy, enigmatic disappearing woman.
Great piece!
Thanks Kymm, I'm glad you liked it.
DeleteLoved the characters, mood and intrigue. I'd love to know where she's gone.
ReplyDeleteThere may be a follow up. Glad you liked it.
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