A writing prompt from Write on Edge and Trifecta inspired by the quotation and definition below:
August rain: the best of the summer gone, and the new fall not yet born. The odd uneven time. (Sylvia Plath)
Rainbow : an illusory goal or hope
My grandfather once told me that he’d spent his whole life
in summer. I was a child then and I
didn’t understand, but I believed him.
There was sunshine in him, always warmth, and he took delight in
everything. Being around him was like an
easy purposeless walk on an August evening through the wooded lanes around his
house. I’d walked those lanes and knew
each turn, each fence, each sunbeam.
Those lanes had seen a thousand thousand of me -- the cowboy, the knight,
the pirate, the explorer, latterly the thwarted romantic hero. We’d walked those lanes for years and
countless summer stories had been told in the dappled light.
My summer was coming to an end. As September slouched over the threshold I’d
leave for university and take up a course that was practical and appropriate, which
would be the gateway into growth and progression and forward planning and
productivity and purpose and perhaps, someday, a comfortable retirement in
which I could take long and easy walks to nowhere and everywhere and then,
ultimately, to nowhere again.
Standing in my grandfather’s garden, between the two apple trees exactly the same age as me, I heard absent echoes of running feet and excited voices overlaying the silence. What did they have to be excited about? Hadn’t they seen the autumn clouds over the nearby woodland? Hadn’t they known about the rain that would turn the green grass to mud and ruin?
Standing in my grandfather’s garden, between the two apple trees exactly the same age as me, I heard absent echoes of running feet and excited voices overlaying the silence. What did they have to be excited about? Hadn’t they seen the autumn clouds over the nearby woodland? Hadn’t they known about the rain that would turn the green grass to mud and ruin?
No. They hadn’t. It had always been summer here, even when the snow piled up so deep and white and crisp that it remade the world. Always summer, and no clouds and no rain could drive away an old man’s smile.
But September was coming. Summer would be a memory, as
glorious, unreal and intangible as a rainbow.
I stepped away from the two apple trees, exactly the same age as me, and back toward the slowly emptying house, and the expressionless faces and low tones of my well dressed relatives.
I stepped away from the two apple trees, exactly the same age as me, and back toward the slowly emptying house, and the expressionless faces and low tones of my well dressed relatives.
What a great way to describe a positive personality. And love the standing between two apples trees just his age.
ReplyDeleteThanks Sandra, glad you liked it
DeleteElegant as ever! LM x
ReplyDeleteThank you Lyssa, much appreciated
DeleteWhat a somber piece, but it's also lovely in how it portrays the recently deceased.
ReplyDeleteGlad you liked it Draug, thank you
DeleteBreathtaking and beautiful as always. I was particularly impressed with the amber captured feeling of this piece and loved the bitterness and fatigue that the character felt towards adulthood, and oh my how much that last line sang.
ReplyDeleteSo glad you liked it
DeleteEven though it's always summer, you've brought in all the seasons.
ReplyDeleteI especially love the snow remaking the world : )
Nice thick white snow always makes me think of fresh starts and new paper
DeleteBeautiful! I love the part about a thousand thousand of me. Great writing, I want to read more of your words. Keep talking, keep telling your perfect stories.
ReplyDeleteBest,
MOV
I hope to! Thank you very much
DeleteSome lovely turns of phrase here, beautifully captured in the emotion, remembrance and reality of the your story. Thanks for linking up.
ReplyDeleteMy pleasure, thank you.
DeleteI love thinking of someone as "spending their whole life in summer." I used to truly hope that I could be one of those people, keep the light, the warmth, the hope alive for others.
ReplyDeleteyour words were like sunshine. I love reading them
Thanks Kir, always glad to please you.
Delete" I heard absent echoes of running feet and excited voices overlaying the silence." This, made my heart ache for long ago and far away.
ReplyDeleteBeautiful
Thanks Renee, much appreciated
Delete"There was sunshine in him, always warmth, and he took delight in everything.Being around him was like an easy purposeless walk on an August evening through the wooded lanes around his house." Beautiful lines underlying a fantastic personality.Loved the contrasting sad yet practical tone at the end and the emphasis on the apple trees:-)
ReplyDeleteReally glad you liked it - thank you
DeleteThis writing hit home for me. Is it based on a true story? I know when my dad died, I lost a bit my own endless summer. I was very close to him.
ReplyDeleteYou did an excellent job with both prompts and I loved the use of the apple trees and your opening line was a perfect gateway into this story.
Well done and thanks for writing this so I could read it:~)
There are parts from real life, and parts imagined, but all the feelings are as real as they come.
DeleteCharming and heartwarming. Your imagery is tangible, vivid. Well done!
ReplyDeleteThanks Shelton, glad you liked it
DeleteTouching and beautiful, I love it. I can picture my dad in his lavender field, a grin on his face.
ReplyDeleteThanks for the feedback, I'm pleased you liked it
DeleteWonderful writing, and congrats on the 2nd place win!
ReplyDeleteI didn't realise till now! Thanks for the feedback and the update :D
DeleteAnd you've captured the essence of growing up loved in three sentences: "Being around him was like an easy purposeless walk on an August evening through the wooded lanes around his house. I’d walked those lanes and knew each turn, each fence, each sunbeam. Those lanes had seen a thousand thousand of me -- the cowboy, the knight, the pirate, the explorer, latterly the thwarted romantic hero."
ReplyDeleteBrilliant, Thomas.
Thank you Cameron, that means a lot
Deletewhoa. i love this. i love how you storytell, how you go from past, to present, then looking towards the future. well written and heartfelt.
ReplyDeleteGlad you liked it, much appreciated
DeleteThank you Jo-Anne, much appreciated
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