Three young heroes, came one by one to slay her. Wicked witch. Perhaps she was, yet she wept as they
died. In the blood of the last bonny boy the
talisman shivered, alive.
I like the way in which you leave to wonder of the witch's multi-faceted persona - was she wicked? what type of tears were shed, as there was apparently reward to be gained. Great depth in so few words, Thomas.
These bonny boys, these heroes-I love that she wept at the nobility of their intentions. This one will stick with me for a while, Thomas:) Excellently done!
I like the way in which you leave to wonder of the witch's multi-faceted persona - was she wicked? what type of tears were shed, as there was apparently reward to be gained. Great depth in so few words, Thomas.
ReplyDeleteWOW..you. This was deliciously devious as if you never quite know her nature. As if the light and dark side of anyone is always swirled.
ReplyDeleteGreat writing, amazing.
There is something else going on! Good one!
ReplyDeleteThere always is! Thank you
DeleteI love the image of the talisman shivering while the witch is watching (hopeful?). Great 33 words!
ReplyDeleteMuch appreciated.
DeleteElegantly crafted, as ever! LM x
ReplyDeleteThanks Lyssa, glad you liked it
DeleteNice! I wonder if she was as evil as believed. Maybe not...
ReplyDeleteA moot point - I suppose it depends which way you're facing.
DeleteSo intriguing. Much left to wonder about.
ReplyDeleteThanks Maggie
DeleteNothing more powerful than blood. Except perhaps a witch's tears.
ReplyDeleteNicely done. Though I'm sure there's more, it stands well alone.
Blood and tears, witch's fears, endless dry and hopeless years...
DeleteGlad you liked it
Love how you were able to make a complicated character in just 33 words. Nice!
ReplyDeleteThanks Brian
Deleteweeping witch... nice touch.
ReplyDeleteGlad you liked it
Deletethe last bonny boy . . . good stuff!
ReplyDeleteThanks Barbara
DeleteWow. There is so much left untold here, yet it simultaneously says so much. Wonderful writing.
ReplyDeletePleased that you liked it, thank you
DeleteWasn't expecting the twist, and it was delightfully dark when came.
ReplyDeleteNaturally :D
Deleteneat how much you got in in 33 words
ReplyDeleteGlad you liked it
DeleteOoh, love this! So much going on in those 33 words. Beautiful!
ReplyDeleteOooh wow this is a nice twist on the old "evil witch" tale! Great job!
ReplyDeleteThis proves that you shouldn't judge someone without knowing them. Very good! I love that you made me want to cry for her.
ReplyDeleteWonderful story here... that talisman really sticks.
ReplyDeleteThese bonny boys, these heroes-I love that she wept at the nobility of their intentions. This one will stick with me for a while, Thomas:) Excellently done!
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