“It was not the thorn bending to the honeysuckles,
but the honeysuckles embracing the thorn.”
but the honeysuckles embracing the thorn.”
The old man was dead, and he was still turning the world
upside down. If Mother Wytlaf had been
the sort to curse she would have cursed his name and his memory and his
ancestors, she would have cursed his flesh and his bone and all his
posterity. She’d have cursed him three
times three, standing, sitting and lying, with spittle and piss and blood, in
song and shadow and silence.
Not being the sort to curse she stood instead on the banks
of the river watching as the small narrow boat drifted downstream, fire already
catching in the oil soaked cloth and straw that surrounded the old man’s body.
A warrior’s funeral he had asked for. Here in the high valley of the moon where no
weapon could come and no blood shed save for life and healing. He’d asked for a warrior’s funeral and her
maidens had pleaded for his request to be granted.
Those same maidens stood by her on the riverbank too, tears
in their eyes reflecting the reds and orange of the old man’s final journey,
the moon invisible in the dark sky above them it being her time of hiding.
How fitting, thought Mother Wytlaf, that the moon will not
lend her presence to this travesty.
How fitting that now it was only the blazing light of the old man’s
corpse that illuminated the scene. After
all he’d remade everything else in his image hadn’t he?
He’d arrived one whole moon earlier, and the sky silver had
been hiding that night too. Old he was
and failing, with old wounds on his body and bitter humour on his lips. He was dying, he told Mother Wytlaf, and
had sought out the high valley of the moon to pass his final days in peace and
comfort.
That was his right, the right of any who came seeking
succour and who did so in peace. She
had welcomed him and set her maidens to tend him, to ease the pain of his old
injuries, to soothe him in his last days, and to hear his stories.
And oh, he could tell stories. He told them of his strange birth, and the
trial of his childhood as he was smuggled from mountain to woodland to deep
caverns, to high crags. He told them of
his master at arms and the ordeals he faced to earn the runes of war etched on
his forearms. He told them of his loves
both won and lost. His maidens listened
as they tended him, and laughed and wept in turn. And he told them of the war. He told them of the war still raging beyond
the world they knew, beyond the mist in the far fields and plains and woodlands
and mountains.
And they listened.
And they listened.
He told them of the warriors striving to keep back the
darkness, of the innocents falling before the foe. He told them of the hopelessness and the
need for healing and wisdom.
And they listened.
And as the old man burned, Mother Wytlaf knew his words
burned too in the hearts and souls of her maidens.
When the vigil was done and the fires burned out, Mother
Wytlaf knew, the maidens would gather their things and don their deep blue
cloaks, and they would depart the high valley of the moon forever.
She wished she had it in her to curse the old man, but a
sister owed her brother the peace he never knew in life, and she held her
tongue.
That is a great story - gave me goosebumps! LM x
ReplyDeleteThanks Lyssa- just the reaction I was hoping for :D
DeleteAh, this is a great story! I loved the twist at the end too-it rings true for so many of us. The fractured relationships we have with our own kin, and the burden that we have to do the right thing by them, no matter what. Great writing, once again!
ReplyDeleteThanks Valerie, I appreciate the feedback and I'm pleased you like the piece. It's always nice to hear from you :D
DeleteWow, great writing....but a sister owed her brother the peace he never knew in life, and she held her tongue. How often things we do for family will cause us pain sometimes.
ReplyDeleteKatie atBankerchick Scratchings
Indeed so. I think there was love between the pair, though they lived such different lives
DeleteYou definitely got me at the ending. Didn't see that coming!
ReplyDeleteI loved reading this story, but my favorite line was this one: "She’d have cursed him three times three, standing, sitting and lying, with spittle and piss and blood, in song and shadow and silence." I loved how you repeated the "threes."
You tell a very good story. I was entertained from beginning to end. That's a challenge to do. Thank you for sharing this:~)
Thanks Sara I'm glad it worked for you - and I'm glad you liked Mother Wytlaf's approach to (not) cursing.
DeleteI love the flow of that first paragraph! Really beautiful story.
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Thank you - glad you liked it
DeleteThree times three is pretty hardcore. That added some emphasis to her story. I was transfixed by this--you did a great job with setting the tone and moving the story along like the river carry off the old man's corpse.
ReplyDeleteHardcore indeed - she'd be good at cursing if she was that way inclined. Thank you for the comment.
DeleteEnthralling from start to surprising finish. Drew me right in!
ReplyDeleteThanks Joe, much appreciated.
DeleteWell done. The first paragraph captured me.
ReplyDeleteI could see his maidens leaving on their quest to heal. And the sister, mourning for him, and for herself.
Thanks Renee I'm glad you liked it
DeleteWow. Powerful ending! and a fun read too... Thanks for linking up!
ReplyDeleteGlad it was fun - thank you!
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