Saturday, 24 May 2014

Hey, you. Yes. You.


Hey.

I’m sending you an image.   It will reach you somehow.



You’ve been unresponsive since we got you back from the enemy, but the doctors say your mind is active in a  dream prison they made for you.  A life so real you can’t escape it.    Reasons to stay there.   

I don’t know what dream it is but my words have to reach you.  

Maybe you’ll hear them, or read them in a book.  

Maybe on a screen.

You have to walk through the door to wake up.  The door in the image.


Please.  Do it now.

(Don't walk through the door, this is just a response to a writing prompt from Light and Shade Challenge, that's all, just a writing exercise, nothing else.   The picture is just a picture from the internet by someone called Sulaco299 at rgb.com)

16 comments:

  1. And here I was wondering if the last year was just a prison construct... ah, well. Nicely done, sir.

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  2. That is brilliant. You have conveyed so much and given hints of an amazing, complex back story in so few words. It really suits the image so well. Out of darkness into light. Lyssa M x

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    1. Thanks Lyssa - hope you're enjoying your holiday

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  3. This is simply brilliant! So much left to the imagination of the reader...a very impressive take on the prompt!

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    1. Thank you Pilgrim, much appreciated

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  4. I want to know more! Perhaps you could use this photo on Monday? More words may help to curb my appetite.

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    1. Glad it was intriguing enough to merit that :D Thank you

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  5. Wow . This was great and actually really involving.

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    1. I'm really pleased you liked it - thank you

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  6. Oh man, if I walk through will it be a beach with an umbrella, a book and an adventure awaiting. Cool piece.

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    1. I'd enjoy that destination myself. Thanks for the feedback

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  7. A wonderful piece of writing Thomas. I loved the idea of a 'dream prison' - so much potential for further writing.

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    1. I always like to point toward more story, even if it's unspoken. Thanks!

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  8. I love this...the idea of being in a coma state and needing to go through the door to wake up. This is really brilliant.

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