Tuesday, 7 May 2013

Legacy



A writing prompt from Write on Edge
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Blood:  - Trifecta
b : human stock or lineage; especially : royal lineage <a prince of the blood>
c : relationship by descent from a common ancestor : kinship
d : persons related through common descent : kindred
(1) : honorable or high birth or descent (2) : descent from parents of recognized breed or pedigree




“You have to help me,” she said, “We’re of the same blood.”

Three in the morning and she’d shaken me awake, grinning broadly and asked if I would help her hide a body.

I’d  got used to this since moving into my grandfather’s house.   She came with the territory it seemed.   She was gorgeous, pale and entirely insane.   At the moment she was dressed as a combination Girl Guide and Victorian funeral mute.  Mute.  I should be so lucky.

“The same blood,” I said, “What does that mean?”     I followed her downstairs.  She paused to lick a landscape painting.   Pink cherry blossom vivid and glorious.  

“That’s not real,” she said, “Just old oil paints.   And we are.  Kindred.  Kissing cousins”   She looked up impishly, her head on one side.  “Do you want to kiss me, cousin?”

“No,” I said.   “And how can we be… cousins.   You’re in my grandfather’s diary.   A pain in the backside he said.”

“Oh,” she said, “Does that mean you want to..”

“No,” I said as she clarified her question with an indelicate gesture.   “Figure of speech.  Means you’re a nuisance.”

“Oh that,” she said, “Suppose so.   We’re related through his grandfather.   Naughty fellow, Josiah.   Stumbled into mother’s grove and had his wicked way with her.   Took him weeks to get away.   Now help me with this body?”

She’d left it on the floor of the lounge.  Small and ugly, limbs twisted, mouth open, staring eyes fixed on the dusty ceiling.

 “It was him or me.”

It was a ventriloquist dummy.

“Alright,” I said wearily, “I’ll bury it in the garden.”

“Goody,” she said, “face down, with salt in its mouth, or it will come back and haunt me.  You.  Us.  Very bad.”

“Whatever,”

I picked up the little wooden and plastic figure.   A long groaning breath of freed air rasped from its mouth and I felt warm blood sticky and foul on my hands beneath its back.

Face down, I decided, with salt in its mouth.  Oh hell yes.

63 comments:

  1. Love the twist, you are so good at this. LM x

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  2. The weary humor in this is amazing. Her licking the painting was perfect, imbuing both childlike wonder and total scary crazy. Though I have to agree with the Fae-like lady, ALL ventriloquist dummies should be buried thus, due to the creep factor alone. why risk it!

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    1. I have to agree - creepy things in general, and the ones that were most commonly available as toys when I was growing up were foul grotesque things with bright orange hair and troll like faces. I'm creeping myself out now, and will stop. *shudders

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  3. Holy cow, you do insane so well. This was so delightfully creepy and funny!

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    1. Thanks Maggie, I have a lot of practise :D

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  4. This was crazy! (And that's a massive compliment, by the way!)

    I just love the characters and their dialogue with one another.

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    1. Really glad you liked it, thank you

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  5. clever use of the picture prompt! and what a tale! (gulp - I hope) :)

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  6. This was creepy, twisted, funny and fabulous! That last line was great! I'd do whatever it took to keep that thing from haunting me, too :)

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    1. You're not kidding. The crazy lady is almost comforting compared to a ventriloquist dummy with a little too much life in it, even when dead.

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  7. Oh my god. This is absolutely divine. You are an incredible writer.

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  8. Ooh, cool! This sort of blood-curdling tale is right up my alley! That would be the alley with the axe murderer lurking in the shadows.

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    1. Ah but that alley leads to such interesting places, it's hard to stay away.

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  9. Well now, I have a feeling I have just finished reading this week's winning entry! What a well-written, multi-layered peek into the mind of the insane and in the ripples that this causes in the world of those trying to deal with it. Has there ever been a ventiloquist dummy who wasn't f**ked in the head!? Bury 'em all, I say!

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    1. Thanks Tom - glad you liked it, and I agree entirely about the ventriloquist dummies. They're up to something.

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  10. Oh hell yes indeed!

    This was insanely good Thomas!!

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    1. Thanks Valerie, so glad you liked it.

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  11. This is really great reading... I really enjoyed the insane the humour and the wickedness in it all..

    Great writing, and of course the details of her licking the painting is a classic

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    1. Well it looked so tasty, all pink and perfect. Glad you liked the story.

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  12. "it was him or me" Well she had no choice then did she? haha this was a romp through crazy town.

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    1. It's a fine old town indeed, thanks for commenting.

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  13. LOL ... This is grotesque but so funny too. lol. Great job! I love it.

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  14. I believe we would call her "bat shit crazy". Love the end. It has just enough weird to be appealing, but not enough to push you away.

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    1. A pretty accurate diagnosis I would say, but she can't help it, not really. Nor does she want to. Thanks for commenting.

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  15. Wow! I loved every line, each character. I am left disappointed that it isn't longer, that there is no novel to sit and devour. :) I hope it does become something longer at some point.

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    1. Really glad you liked it - it's nothing longer at the moment and I am twitchy about adding another WIP to distract me... but there is an appeal there.

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  16. Terrific! Well-written, great twist, and great 2nd twist. Delightfully creepy someone else said, and I can't improve on that.

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    1. Thanks Steph, really glad you liked it.

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  17. Sometimes the Crazy is not so crazy! Love this-your dialogue is inspired, and this read almost like a screenplay.

    But you should always circle the body with salt, too. Just in case.

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    1. But if they do it right and circle the body with salt, then I can't bring the dummy back in a couple of chapter's time, creeping and limping and desperate to steal someone's voice for itself...

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  18. Love this! Great writing, awesome characters and fabulous blend of crazy and creepy.

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    1. Thanks Suzanne, really glad you liked it

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  19. This was a wonderfully creepy read. Your female character is deliciously crazy.

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    1. She is isn't she? Much appreciated.

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  20. Holy cow, that was awesome. I love everything about this piece, Tom. That girl is whackadoodle, and I'd love to read about six novels of this. Great job. Thank you for sharing this with us.

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    1. Thank you so much, I'm really glad you liked it.

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  21. What a crazy,loveable piece!Thomas you really are an awesome story teller!

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    1. That's the best praise I can imagine - thank you!

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  22. Oh wow. Seriously creepy ending. I loved it!

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    1. Thanks Victoria, I do enjoy a bit of creepy from time to time.

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    2. And by "bit" I mean "lot" and by "from time to time" I mean "constantly"

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  23. I've been lying low. Working too much. Not enough writing. But.
    I checked the Trifecta post.
    And I'm glad I did, this is great. The last line was awesome and then some. LOVE!

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  24. Congratulations on your win! Sooooo well deserved!

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    1. Thanks Maggie, I was and am thrilled to bits

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  25. That was awesome. I rather like the crazy whimsical lady with just a bit of creepy. Well done!

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  26. I see why you won face down, oh, I mean hands down. This was outrageously inventive and well crafted. Congratulations.

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    1. Thanks very much - I'm as proud as punch about the win, but more so that people liked my story

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  27. What a fun, original, insanely (pun intended)entertaining story. Much deserved accolades. I look forward to reading more from you.

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    1. There will be more to come I promise! Thanks for commenting.

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  28. Oh, insane and impossible, deadly! And of course, the unexpected bit. Made me laugh out loud, especially the raunchy humor.

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    1. Hi Cameron, sorry I missed your comment till now - really glad you liked this piece.

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